What would you say my style is?

I only wear skinny jeans…(any color usually but mostly black) (but if i wear sweatpants it would be black or gray)
i wear pyramid stud belts from hot topic (any color)
i wear band shirts and band rubber brackets from hot topic or concerts
i also wear plaid shirts
dark blue, maron, or black nail polish
black eye liner and black mascara (top and bottom)
i listen to screamo and punk
my hair is dyed black with a red tint and blonde underneath
i wear converse and vans
i have band posters all around my room
i usually wear guitar pick necklaces
i play the electric guitar
also i wear military boots
lauren s…SHUT THE FUCK UP BITCH…THIS IS MY FRIENDS ACCOUNT…I DIDN’T EVEN KNOW SHE ASKED IT BEFORE WE ARE PRETTY MUCH THE SAME SOOO…AND IM NEVER ON HERE CUZ I HAVE A FUCKING LIFE AND IM NOT ASKING PEOPLES QUESTION ALL DAY…WHAT EVER QUESTION I ANSWERED ARE MY FRIENDS ANSWERS AND QUESTIONS…AND WHY WERE YOU GOING THOUGH HER QUESTIONS SHE ASKED! GET A FUCKING LIFE…YOU’RE AN ASSHOLE!

LOVE, LACEY<3
MAT!...BMTH is fucking amazing! <3
o, and i am a girl haha
LAUREN S,

OKAY JUST FUCKING LET IT GO...AND IN 19 IF YOU MUST KNOW

I HATE PEOPLE LIKE YOU, ALWAYS MINDING PEOPLE BUSINESS JUST GET A LIFE!

I'M DONE WITH THIS SO YOU CAN SAY ANYTHING YOU'D LIKE, BUT YOU WILL JUST BE TALKING TO YOUR SELF

Answer by missnewnew2006
Rocker/Skateboard Swag

Answer by MAT!
does it matter, be who you want to be.

…i skateboard, i play guitar, and I wear pink polos, and LOVE BMTH. I doesn’t matter, just be you

Answer by Jimmy
Well Id say It’s Alto (: Eaterrway Nice Style +10

Answer by Laura
Rocker!

Answer by IamHonestt
Your 19 and acting like that lol? …..

What do you think? Answer below!

Mayan pyramid panaramic


Image by eytonz

^ says it all. I tried to write something with all five senses: taste, touch, sight, sound, and smell.

Is there anything you’d rephrase? Do you think I included all of the senses? Any punctuation mistakes? I’m tired right now so I can’t pick up as much as I usually would.

Be harsh if you want.

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Khafre's pyramid

First was the hot air, sticky and stuffy. My palms were brushing the surfaces of the cramped, downward passage and my feet pitter-pattered like little rat-feet. I hunched over as the opening narrowed, leaning more on my hands. Soon it was a fast crawl. I was choking on the dusty heat, trying my hardest to get it out, get out of there, and burst into the tomb.

The room was bare except for the sarcophagus. Khafre's coffin. He wasn't there, of course, but you could see his head outside, on the head of a giant sphinx. They say it used to be beautiful, painted blue and white and gold, but now everything at Giza has been washed away into the dust. Inside the tomb, even by looking closely all you could see were shadows of ancient brush strokes. The sarcophagus was empty, a huge, gaping hole in the stone which you could just fall into and someone might not even notice.

Answer by Jeannie
Pretty cool- very sensory; nice images. I think your first comma should be a dash, but I could be wrong. Sticky is unclear and cliche. Please rephrase ‘pitter-pattered’ (shuffled, scuffed the ___ floor, ?) and ‘rat-feet’ should have no dash, I think. Instead of choking on the dusty heat, how about just the dust, or the dust and heat, or ‘I couldn’t breathe for all the dust and humidity’ or something. This was enjoyable to read. Best wishes.

Answer by Kitty Has Clawz
Soon it was a fast crawl – This sentence doesn’t seem to be working, it breaks up the flow, which was really nice the first half of the passage. Either rephrase it or cut it out completely. You could also do something like this:

I hunched over as the opening narrowed, leaning more on my hands; they burned from the pressure as I quickened my pace.

was choking — “I choked” is a bit stronger. “was” always weakens the verb

The next sentence could be cut in half, the rest seems redundant.
I choked on the dusty heat, trying my hardest to make it through and burst into the tomb.

I’m going to rephrase the second paragraph. Use what works for you, disregard what doesn’t.

Trying to get rid of “was” “wasn’t” and “you”
A sarcophagus remained the only item in the room. Khafre's coffin. He no longer rested here, but I could see his head, carved into the giant sphinx outside. Before everything in Giza had been washed away into the dust, it had been beautiful, painted blue, white and gold. At least, that’s what I’d been told. Now all that remained were shadows of ancient brush strokes. The sarcophagus stood empty, a gaping hole in the stone, waiting for unaware victims to fall into the darkness.

You covered touch, sound, sight, and smell-sorta. I didn’t get a sense of taste though. Though you touched base on these they could be a lot stronger. Try to make a list for each. Seven things she can touch, taste, smell, hear, and see. Seven sounds (crumbling rock, shifting traps, the echo of the tomb, her thumping heart.. etc), seven feelings (the dust in her eyes, the scraped along her arms, the blood seeping from the cuts on her knees.. etc.),seven tastes (the sour sweat running into her mouth, the terrifying taste of death when she enters the tomb, the bitter blood as she bites her lip out of fear, the fleshy taste of dust as she coughs it up..etc) seven sites (this should be easy, everything around her, which you covered.), seven smells (a burning smell of rocks rubbing together, the clammy smell of being cramped, the smell of her blood, the ancient smell of a tomb, the smell of time and abandonment – as if she could really smell how long it’s been here…etc be creative)

Just make lists.
Also, she was crawling and then suddenly in the tomb, I feel like you’re missing something.

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