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Ryder jumped up using his hands to grab the drip cap of the window. He lifted his legs and kicked his feet through the glass. The window shattered into pieces and dropped in a shower of broken glass beneath him. Slowly he moved his body into the empty space and swung himself inside.
The warehouse was roomy and clean enough to know it was frequently used. The floor was abandoned besides the shards of glass, an empty truck shuttle, and pipes that were stacked in piles ready to be boxed and shipped.
The glass cracked under Ryder’s feet as he approached a pile. From the top he reached over and stole one, "Come on out, Ignawt. You do have the first hit." Ryder walked to center of the room. Listening he tightened his grip around the pipe, "I'm waiting, whenever your ready." Ryder looked like he was by himself; Ryder looked like he was talking to himself. But Ryder wasn't. Ryder knew everything about Ignawts, how they hunted, where they hunted, how to pick up their trails, even what they smelt like.
"Little Venatra, all of you are so ignorant and big headed." hissed an absent voice.
"We are. Are we done playing hide and seek now?" Ryder raked his hand through his dark hair. He moved a few steps forward.
"Not yet."
He tapped the pipe against the ground creating a perpetual ringing that carried through the warehouse. "I know you Ignawts don't like these types of noises. So, does this hurt? Does it?"
Just behind Ryder a pyramid of pipes crashed to the concrete. Nice one, Ryder thought as he whipped around and appeared across the warehouse in the blink of an eye. With both hands on the pipe he pressed it to the now revealed Ignawt's nape, "Found you."
The Ignawt was just as ugly as any other Ignawt Ryder McKinley had run into. Silver pasty skin, same tattoo like mark snaking down its neck, slit black eyes, oily smell.

I neeed feedback on this. I’m not really looking for grammar correction or anything like that.
I just want to know if this was the beginning of a book if you would continue reading (BTW my sister posted this earlier so I’m not stealing this me and her are writing this together.)
So do you like it so far? would you keep reading? PLuheze tell us! were desperate to know )

Answer by JJ
I will say, it is interesting and I wanted to know what was going on, but you need to work on your imagery and detail. Right now I’m reading Charles Dickens “Great Expectations” and Dickens is a master of direct exposition. That is, describing a character directly like you did with the ignawt. If you could put a clearer image what the Ignawt looked like there, I think it would be more effective. Also, try to use more “creative” verbs. Like for example: “he leaped” instead of jumped. Other than that very nice idea.

Answer by Kayleigh Lewinsky
Overall, I thought it was very good. I was just a little confused on where Ryder was, and what he had against the Ignawts though- It wasn’t very clear to me. It would be a bit better if you actually described a location they were and how Ryder and the Ignawt got there in the first place. Also, Instead of saying Ryder at the beginning of every sentence he was in you could use some pronouns like he, him, ect.. but overall I liked it a lot (; good luck!! xox

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Hi, I currently have two 12″ L7 Kicker sub-woofers installed in my vehicle. They are currently running off of a 2 Channel 3000 watt Royal Blue Pyramid Amplifier. They work GREAT! I love them, but sense i have so little room in my truck and i still want more bass and hit, I am considering on purchasing two 12″ Pioneer shallow (2-ohm) sub-woofers that would fit snuggly under my driver and passenger seats. The question I have here is that, if i were to purchase these two slim’s i was wondering, would i have to add yet another amp to power these? Would using the same amp decrease the power and quality of my other two sub-woofers? If i have to add another amp, would I need to use a capacitor (seeing as how i do not have one now)? And finally, if I were to use another amp, how would i wire it to my battery, or if I had to bridge them together, could i run the risk of blowing my current set up?

I am sorry for all the questions, when i was setting up my system I really didn’t need this info, so i just purchased a good/cheap amp along with the best subs i know of. (Yes it is a matter of opinion, please don’t bash on brands.)

Answer by Justin
i have done this before its not as scary as it seems yes you need another amp you wire it exactly the same as the first one and is totally independant of the first one two seperate power wires two seperate grounds the only thing you need to do is run another remote wire form the first amp to the second amp and they will both turn on

ok make sure you dont get the idea you can run the power or ground from one amp to another

oh and if you need more rca’s out of the deck you can use y cables to split the signal you can get em at walmart

good luck man thats gonna be an amazing system

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